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Once again, I truly enjoyed proof-reading the above mentioned article.

I believe that the translator, Gilda Fabozzi, did an excellent job in capturing the essence of this article.

The following are some modifications I thought would enhance the translation, but nevertheless I would appreciate a third party's opinion on such.

I will proceed by identifying the modification(s) per paragraph number.

Paragraph #2 => change "los" to "les" in the first line.

Paragraph #5 => change "eso" to "esto". The article refers to "this" which translates to "esto".

Paragraph #6 => change "remplazar" to"re-emplazar".

change ......."según los beneficios que intentemos obtener de ella"

to ......"según intentemos obtener beneficios de ella"

Paragraph #7 => change "lo expresó así" to "lo expresóde la siguiente manera".

'Paragraph #16 => change ("no esperando nada a cambio") to ("no esperes' nada a cambio").

Paragraph #27 => Last line in the paragraph => change "fortalezala" to "fortaleza".

Paragraph #28 => First line in the paragraph => change "sacerdocio" to "ministerio".

My following comments are not related to the translation to Spanish, per say:

Paragraph #1 => Reference to "Lucas 21:16" not exactly stated as per LBLA.

Paragraph #10 => Couldn't see the relation between these references and the paragraph (Juan 8:34; Romanos 6:16; 2 Pedro 2:19).

P.S. Thanks Charissa for the link to the instructions on how to convert my keyboard to Spanish. :-)

In Chirst's Love,

Marina.